I felt that my previous feedback was all valid and I tried to incorporate it the best I could. I did this by trying to add a little more emotion as well as talking a little more about how I will keep my costs down and the specific foods I will try provide.
https://youtu.be/0k-b8oHXoC8
Hey Kristen,
ReplyDeleteIt looks that you did show more emotion on what you were offering, you emphasize your points really good and explained yourself right to the point. The only thing I would suggest is to present the idea like you want to convince all the investors why they should go for it, show that you have passion for it and it will look that you are more secure about what you are coming up with. Aside from that, good job!
Hey Kristen,
ReplyDeleteI like how you start off your pitch with a scenario, that is a good way to get the audience's attention and appeal to them. Also, you did show more enthusiasm, but some more would be better as well; trust me, I usually have the same problem. The biggest issue I had with the video wasn't even self inflicted: I would say to try to get in a more quiet area to draw as much attention to yourself as you possibly can, rather than the surrounding noise (i.e. fire detector alarm or whatever that was).