What stuck out to me the most in my feedback was that the video had a faint noise in the background due to my recording device. It was mistaken as a fire alarm or something but in reality I had no idea it was there so I hope it's better this time.
For this video, I tried to add more emotion than ever before. I also took Professor Pryors advice by turning the camera sideways and also tried to make sure the sound wasn't there.
https://youtu.be/XdzTYKJ3zag
Hi Kristen,
ReplyDeleteI liked your elevator pitch. I saw your last elevator pitch and it seems you made a lot of adjustments. You have your camera sideways and it seems that you like your business idea because you are showing enthusiasm. I also made some mistakes in my last pitch. However, I read the feedback that I got and tried to do some adjustments like you. In my opinion, after doing 3 pitches we should be better at this. I think that I improved a lot. Regarding your business idea, you should try to make it real if possible because it will help a lot of people. You did a great job! Thank you for sharing.
Hey Kristen! You absolutely killed this elevator pitch! Primarily, the walk-in of the video made your pitch come to life and made it more authentic. I love how you precisely knew your pitch and used physical cues to talk about your product, comparing it to other services/products. You should certainly look into launching it. My only suggestion for any future pitches would be to speak up and use for emphasis in your voice. Overall you did an amazing job.
ReplyDeleteHey Kristen,
ReplyDeleteI can see the growth in your elevator pitches! I can tell you definitely see more comfortable and therefore it is easier for us, as the audience, to feel your emotions. You did a great job with physical cues as well. I agree with Gg, to add texture to your pitch consider adding crescendos to parts you want to emphasize. Overall great job!!
Hey Kristen,
ReplyDeleteI definitely feel that the beginning of the video grabbed my attention, I liked the professional look and the empowering pose you chose (even though I don't know if it was on purpose). The attention grabber is effective, but as others said, maybe adding more strength to your voice in for example, when you are emphasizing why they should go to your fast food restaurant, make them pay more attention by having power and security in the voice. Other than that, great pitch.